Drew Dischmann
5th Period/ AP Lang & Comp
4-2-13
Beloved
Analysis 3
In
Beloved, Toni Morrison is able to
show the hardship and deprivation Sethe has been forced to endure through her
detailed characterization and the dialogue such certain characters have in
saddening moments throughout her novel. After Sethe learns of Halle’s sedentary
nature while she was getting raped, she looks towards Paul D as somebody she
can trust and begins to love him even more than she already does. With the
memories of Halle in the back of her head, and her newfound knowledge of
Halle’s actions, Sethe has a difficult time trusting both the people she loves
and becoming accustomed to the actions of those around her. Sethe’s ideas and
beliefs prove this when Morrison writes, “she (Sethe) knew Paul D was adding
something to her life – something she had wanted to count on”(112). This
reliance and longing Sethe has (for somebody to count on) stems from the past
almost twenty years of Sethe being on her own. Sethe forces herself to distrust
those around her because of her relationship with Halle. This negative
relationship causes Sethe to be “scared to” count on those around her, and
welcome Paul D into her life (112). Paul D has made a positive impact on her
life, even in the short time he has been with her, but Sethe is unable to make
the leap towards starting a new life: one with Paul D. With the emergence of
her daughter’s ghost, the saddening knowledge Sethe has uncovered regarding her
past, and her inability to truly love Paul D, Morrison is able to show the true
hardship and suffering Sethe has gone through in her life.
Drew,
ReplyDeleteYou do really well to look at the content of the writing and the events in the book, but you don't acknowledge the rhetorical aspect of Morrison's writing. Do more of that.
Teddy
Drew,
ReplyDeleteI agree with Teddy, it would compliment your good work on context to add in more analysis. Your evidence should reveal something about the passage and characters, not just move the plot along. Towards the end of your paragraph you have some good ideas. Develop these more.
-Caleb
Drew,
ReplyDeleteBe cautious to avoid summary... I can clearly see that the plot of the book comes naturally to you. But, can you show me some deeper insights and a little more risk taking? There are many sections of this passage that you can analyze in great depth...EXPAND.
-Bryce
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ReplyDeleteDrew,
ReplyDeleteWhere you should begin with is a more focused, less broad topic sentence. In accordance with what Caleb and Bryce said, there is summary and I believe the TS is what sets you up to make that mistake.
-Zeryab
Drew,
ReplyDeleteYou have a good basis of content analysis but sometimes you fall into summary. If you just mix in some more rhetorical analysis you could have a very strong paragraph